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The one that got away (Secret Sonnet)

by Paganini Jones



Such a still airless morning
for a walk
but we went anyway,
having planned it days before.

We had studied the maps,
talked endlessly about who would take what kit,
considering just what was possible.

I was to provide rucksacks,
my camera,
food for us both
(maybe some plum crumble?)
and that sort of thing.

You said,
"No okra",
knowing I like Carribbean food.

You drove,
brought maps,
the dog,
and a crate of drink.

I took photos.
Nothing special or too alarming.

There was one
I
missed:
I think I was too slow
getting the camera out.

All you can see
is
your dog's
fuzzy snout!


05/10/2011

Author's Note:
Yup. It looks nothing like a sonnet. Too many lines. No iambs. As far as I understand (and I'm still learning...) it follows the guidelines of a secret sonnet. It can be formatted differently, to give 14 lines of 10 syllables rhyming in English style and ending in a couplet. A true sonnet? probably not. Fun to try to write? Definitely!

To see the version in true sonnet form go HERE Which do you prefer?

Posted on 05/10/2011
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