See? This is what I'm talk'n about...Just enough to make the reader feel "let in" on the way you look at things, but not so much that we can't fill in the blanks with our own perspective! Again, I LOVE it, but hate that it had to be written. (I'm not generally very good at separating a poetic work from a poetic play)

There's a back story in this poem that's largely unspoken but strongly inferred, and it carries a huge amount of "true-to-life" emotional resonance. You've done a masterful, nuanced job of contextualizing the situation into a very effective and memorable poem.

That ending is certainly a whole lot of memorable. Some very strong imagery indeed.