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by Kristine BrieseI know you in darkness.
It's better that way
because my eyes are empty
when I look at you.
It's the same with silence.
Better because
my ears are empty
when you speak.
And why would my
mouth be different?
Open to yours,
and yet empty, empty.
So there you are,
unseen and unheard,
untasted and unkissed.
But wait.
My hands can feel you.
Warm and malleable,
smooth and stretchable,
your skin delivers sensation.
This brings new hope,
a promise of familiarity
and companionship,
perhaps even emotion.
I suddenly find myself open.
02/20/2011 Author's Note: It's been years since I've written anything. Please give me honest critique and suggestions while I try to come back.
Posted on 02/20/2011
Copyright © 2026 Kristine Briese
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 02/20/11 at 09:12 PM ... nice, very nice..... |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 02/20/11 at 09:45 PM ...it is a great opening for a 'coming-back'. i see that the use of words are prim-0; the narrator to the whomever[could be two child/teen or two sceince majors - or professors; a very nice[not the old meaning of just nice--sorta like a vintage car niiiiiice]. i too admire the gestalt of the poetics. heavy. light. regular words.
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| Posted by Laura Doom on 02/20/11 at 11:12 PM I'm reading this as self-discovery, a tentative reunion of parallel estranged personae, sensory recognition as the 'meeting place'; but that might just be a hot-air comment balloon :>
If my mouth wasn't agape, I'd tell you how good it is to see you writing again... |
| Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 02/21/11 at 12:14 PM welcome back! i'm going to echo marie on this one and say, you haven't lost a thing! it's fun to see something new from you again. |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 02/21/11 at 02:01 PM the last stanzas of this poem testify to a rebirth in and of themselves...welcome back Kristine...you can only improve with each new attempt, but methinks not much improvement can be added to what is an excellent re-start. |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 02/21/11 at 10:45 PM great to see you writing again, especially as you've returned with something so good. :) just let it come. |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 02/22/11 at 10:40 PM Fascinating use of comparison and contrast. Ending very sensuous as well. |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 03/20/11 at 01:49 PM this piece opens gently, like a blossoming flower, how it gently delivers, how it fleshes out into something tangible for all of us, the humanity is astounding, kudos poet, welcome back ;) peace, jewels xoxox |
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