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holiday ku
by Jim Benz
rushing
into the kitchen--
smoked turkey
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feasting--
how our over-stuffed
bellies gurgle
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amidst company
an epic belch
draws stares
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soft-blowing gasses
beneath the table
we all look guilty
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delighted by football
on hd tv--
wives conversing
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looks like sleet--
pouring another round
of cabernet
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twelfth month
look! over there!
grampa's drunk again
12/09/2010 Author's Note: inspired by Sigurdur's prompt in the tadpole circle [thanks Sig!]
Posted on 12/09/2010
Copyright © 2024 Jim Benz
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 12/09/10 at 06:14 PM Wonderful! |
| Posted by Paul Lastovica on 12/10/10 at 02:54 AM while others may stare dumbly at he who belches with epic proportions, I applaud such efforts enthusiastically ... on a really good day i may even return fire! |
| Posted by Stephan Anstey on 12/10/10 at 07:05 PM the 4th and 6th totally nailed it for me.
the last one is almost a hit, but I feel like the first line doesn't offer the hint that we need to use grampa as a distraction. I almost wanted to read it as a person snatching a nip, or stealing a cookie, but there wasn't quite the connection for me.
That was the one I stuck on the longest though, so it can't be that bad ;) |
| Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 12/16/10 at 09:19 PM Hah. Grandpa's usually a lot more fun that way anyway. |
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