a black syringe
by Jim Benz
on the velvet tide
of a black syringe
I almost believe
the sun is melting
Posted on 11/09/2010
Copyright © 2022 Jim Benz
|Member Comments on this Poem|
|Posted by V. Blake on 11/10/10 at 05:45 AM|
This is fantastic, Jim. Short, but brutally powerful despite that. It deserves a title. I hope you give it one.
|Posted by Stephan Anstey on 11/10/10 at 02:04 PM|
them word things. they're so wordy the way you use'm. It's like you say a billion things with just one little statement. I feel inadequate now. I need to write less when i write more.
|Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 11/10/10 at 03:28 PM|
I've had days like that. Great image.