a black syringe

by Jim Benz

on the velvet tide
of a black syringe
I almost believe
the sun is melting


Posted on 11/09/2010
Copyright © 2022 Jim Benz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by V. Blake on 11/10/10 at 05:45 AM

This is fantastic, Jim. Short, but brutally powerful despite that. It deserves a title. I hope you give it one.

Posted by Stephan Anstey on 11/10/10 at 02:04 PM

them word things. they're so wordy the way you use'm. It's like you say a billion things with just one little statement. I feel inadequate now. I need to write less when i write more.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 11/10/10 at 03:28 PM

I've had days like that. Great image.

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