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a black syringe
by Jim Benzfloating
on the velvet tide
of a black syringe
I almost believe
the sun is melting 11/09/2010 Posted on 11/09/2010
Copyright © 2024 Jim Benz
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| Posted by V. Blake on 11/10/10 at 05:45 AM This is fantastic, Jim. Short, but brutally powerful despite that. It deserves a title. I hope you give it one. |
| Posted by Stephan Anstey on 11/10/10 at 02:04 PM them word things. they're so wordy the way you use'm. It's like you say a billion things with just one little statement. I feel inadequate now. I need to write less when i write more. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 11/10/10 at 03:28 PM I've had days like that. Great image. |
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