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unsweetened sorrow of parting

by Laura Doom

Story Inconsequence

Sitting
Penitence
quirk inconvenience
ll begin
[to] pass time
  imagine splash waterfall
  nymph thrall nature[s] call

turned words whine
miracle goes waste
  impression[s] hues refract
gleam cateract

relieves aftertaste
sublimates view
  flush spring lustrates illusion
  absolution ablution

Conceit wash hands
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Your

uncomfortably






  nectared

  mellowed
misty
jaundiced
  first


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The of
 
 
 
A of
so I
the
  of
  a in to

that your to
A It to
 
  the of
me of your
and my
  of
  in

I my of you
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02/18/2008

Author's Note: I blame Jim. Turning this stuff on myself lowlights one of of of of of of of my many deficits by excess :>)

Posted on 09/12/2010
Copyright © 2024 Laura Doom

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Paul Lastovica on 09/13/10 at 01:30 AM

i am compelled to re-arranged these parts into something of my own - very lego-like.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/13/10 at 07:01 PM

...this Jim of whom you speak, does the live around here or ride a bicycle...a crazyily wonderful write, like a whip-o-lash, i hung on...got scared 'cause you made me see me.

Posted by Jim Benz on 09/13/10 at 09:32 PM

Without bold "across" sublimated via "uncomfortably" knocked between first concerning "penitence" through "inconvenience" despite "A of ... me of your" save (except regarding) "of / in" for plus inside of like near minus, maybe? [i.e. etc etc]

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