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Malocchio

by Jon-Jacob F Deal

If looks could kill
I'd shoot you a Dahmer
And after it was done with you
It would eat your flesh and shit you out
So that at last your outsides would be
As ugly as you are within.

08/29/2010

Posted on 08/29/2010
Copyright © 2024 Jon-Jacob F Deal

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by E. A. Pugh on 08/29/10 at 06:02 PM

It scares me a little; I had to think about that shooting Dahmer. I do like the shortness of most poems. It is very direct and perhaps a little relief would be more appeasing to my hopelessly undereducated opinion.

Posted by Linda Fuller on 09/04/10 at 11:10 PM

Ouch! Biting (pun intended).

Posted by Andrea Colton on 11/17/10 at 08:46 AM

Disturbing. I definitely wouldn't want to be on the receiving end of this...or the giving, for that matter...lol...buuuttt very interesting nonetheless. There's no subtlety in this, and sometimes that's refreshing. Pissed off and to-the-point.

Posted by Kristine Briese on 06/14/11 at 03:11 AM

I agree with Andrea; very disturbing. But of course that's what you intended, so kudos.

Posted by A. Reed on 08/17/11 at 10:39 PM

The best thought I have read in some time.

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