bared teeth behind backs

by Rowan Luis

I'm living in a box
of woodlice and flies

of cold fires

with pinprick light
and no sound

a vacuum of inward breaths
but no out


Posted on 08/20/2010
Copyright © 2021 Rowan Luis

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Linda Fuller on 08/20/10 at 05:25 PM

Startling, claustrophobic, intriguing...

Posted by Johnny Crimson on 08/20/10 at 07:36 PM

So tight is your verse. Really together and coherent. i.e. You make being distant from yourself seem the other way around. ha. Really enjoyed this.

Posted by Paul Lastovica on 08/22/10 at 02:42 PM

the last line sends me underwater - the lines above weigh me down to the ocean floor. Nice write =)

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