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june first

by Ava Blu


begging,
breathing in-between each roll of the dice
and she sees him
and she knows june will be enough

and she is wrong.

06/01/2010

Posted on 06/01/2010
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Jeffrey Parren on 06/01/10 at 02:25 PM

From a verbal standpoint the beginning "b's" make the reading rapid from the start and contribute to the overall flow. The repetition of "she" also makes the poem speak. Lest we forget the meaning, which I think we have all gone through. ~JPP

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 06/01/10 at 02:54 PM

Off to a pretty brilliant start. Sounds like June will be a month of ghosts. There's definitely a weird kind of phantom quality to the words and image found in this. I love it, at any rate.

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