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balancing [2-17-2010]

by Ava Blu


i feel forced to invade your privacy, i feel a hammer inside my lungs and it feeds off of your lies and it feels like i am going to collapse
and it seems i am right back where i started.

02/17/2010

Posted on 02/18/2010
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Amie Golda on 02/18/10 at 02:49 AM

I love how you build this up and then end with a right back where you started. It definitely reinforces the title. Great write.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 02/18/10 at 02:10 PM

What makes this poem almost haunting in a way is how it doesn't seem angry. These are the kind of words that usually lend themselves to anger, but I don't get a sense of that here. All I read into this is sadness, and that's more powerful than rage in this case. Stunning.

Posted by Beth K Hannah on 02/18/10 at 03:22 PM

i really enjoyed this. i liked the shortness, yet the amount of emotion within was staggering

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