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Broken Notes
by Christopher ShinI walk out with
a broken soul.
And it may sound
cliche with all
the drama in
this chaotic world.
But with a broken
note I take the last
forget me nots with me.
The kisses of your lips.
Whisper words of saving
graces in my sinking ship.
I wish you would hold
me for a moment so
I can feel the warmth
of the torn words.
You drag the last
remaining hope,
and I am yours
forever and ever.
01/17/2010 Posted on 01/17/2010
Copyright © 2024 Christopher Shin
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/17/10 at 05:11 PM I love this line..."I take the last forget me nots with me."
I think that is always the hope really -that no matter who does what to who, who leaves, or how much time has gone by -some part of us is always with them -we are remembered. A lovely piece you gave us Christopher...thank you.
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| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 01/17/10 at 10:01 PM Yes,Very well expressed. Any reader of these words can easily feel the sadness the emotions render. |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/18/10 at 04:46 AM Alas, the reluctance we have to leave in any capacity... so well expressed here. Thanks, Chris. |
| Posted by Sarah Wolf on 01/19/10 at 02:01 AM "You drag the last remaining hope" That summed it up all right there... What better line to explain a broken heart? I think this was simply yet sadly beautiful. |
| Posted by Jared Fladeland on 01/19/10 at 08:01 AM very nice work. heartbreaking really. felt it in my gut with this one |
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