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the death of Mr. Sophistication
by Ava Bluyour persona
with the flask in your coat pocket
full of rum you really hate the taste of,
but you drink anyway
the flask reads,
“jesus died for our sins”
but you say you believe in god
take a swig,
take one every time another 14 year old girl looks 18
you have your conventions,
your convictions;
can you tell the difference anymore?
take a swig
take one every time the girl in your bed isn’t me
every time the song you hear slices your wrist one more time
have your smoke while you peer down at me
have your smoke while your lungs expand
have your rum
have another drink for the bruises on your legs
you get shot down through every floor of the hotel
take another swig
the elevator opens,
the bell may be ringing,
just take another swig to help your head stop aching
this isn’t the apocalypse,
you aren’t really going to hell yet;
it’s just the death
of Mr. Sophistication.
01/16/2010 Author's Note: a mix of real and fake
Posted on 01/16/2010
Copyright © 2026 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/16/10 at 04:30 PM Well it's a pretty heady mix, at any rate. You use some fairly simple language to paint some pretty strong, almost lyrical images of this persona. This reads like an introduction to a much larger story, and I really like that quality in it. The ending is particularly striking. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/16/10 at 07:49 PM And what a mix!!! A headlong rush into decline, decay and death, no mercy on the way down...fantastic imagery here Ava! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/17/10 at 12:11 AM ...no mercy but no remorse either -- a far more damning trait IMHO. Anyway, the image from this is crystal clear. Great job, Ms. Blu.
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| Posted by Allison Smith on 01/17/10 at 11:06 AM Love the opening stanza especially. |
| Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 01/20/10 at 03:36 PM Whoa! I don't know whether to look for him in the obituaries, on a milk carton, or a wanted poster... this is so good. The back story of this character seems intense. Really like this piece! ~N |
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