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covet
by Ava Bluit was 70 days ago
when the bitter taste in our mouths turned to Summer
and something in our tongues tasted of honeysuckle
a web spun within control
right above my head
right when you rested your chin on my hip
and gave me my first lesson on forgiveness
we wouldn't go out in the rain
not while there were birds above us pecking at our holes
pecking their way through the guilt
you may tire of me,
i know you did,
but it isn't the same wrinkle in my brow when it's someone else
touching me
it was 54 days ago
when the things left behind were being thrown outside
in the apartment i abandoned
in the town i gave up
and something in my eyes made you feel abused
and our bed was no longer right side up
it was folded and held together with only a small amount of adhesive
it was 26 days ago
i asked you to play a movie i enjoy
i asked for one moment of silence
one time to get the thoughts of walking away out of my system
and something in your smile was different
it was satisfaction
and it was dedication
but i didn’t know
i didn’t know which way it would lean
it was yesterday
and i know how it had to lean
and i know what it means to be a face on a milk carton
a bodybag with no identification
no way out
and it had been something coming all along
it had been in your veins 70 days ago
and now
now it is today that i crawl under the house
trying to bury it again. 01/06/2010 Posted on 01/06/2010
Copyright © 2025 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 01/06/10 at 09:33 PM There's a lot of great images in this, and I also love the way it builds towards that final image (it's a hell of a line to follow, something I almost wish could be in short story form), but what I think I love about this the most is the form itself. I could be nuts, but I don't think I've seen this particular one out of you too terribly often. It lends itself really well to that storytelling line this one follows, to some truly engaging imagery (especially that second stanza) on your part. I love it. |
| Posted by Allison Smith on 01/06/10 at 10:16 PM I enjoy your writing immensely. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/07/10 at 04:05 AM I wish I could express emotion or life experience half as well as you. There's always such a gravity about everything you write. |
| Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 01/08/10 at 02:16 AM GIRL!!!! This is amazing! Devastatingly amazing! Beautiful and real and full and deadly and I am again in awe of you! ~N |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 01/11/10 at 04:44 AM umm, this is incredible to me. i usually don't like well-spaced, well-timed poetry like this...though still free verse it has a structure...BUT!...the numbered days, the specificity of the moments in time...this is kinda gorgeous in a very broken down lachrymose way...yep. |
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