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Modest Means
by Rachel Bennettwhen breadcrumbs align as meteors
or stars in tight alliance
as crude crusty constellations,
when inkstains on fingertips
drift in little boats
along canals of wisdom,
when scars are plateaus
and cliffs that remind me
to regress from regrets,
why then should I request
mere perfection? 01/04/2010 Author's Note: Poemuary entry for 4 Jan 2010.
Posted on 01/04/2010
Copyright © 2024 Rachel Bennett
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/05/10 at 12:54 AM ...rachel, a more than great thing here! lady, it's taller than you. such a way with words on this one. i loved it. a stopper and thinkerer, this one. each line, a blanket for a comfort, even tho' we're star-flung. |
| Posted by V. Blake on 01/05/10 at 02:54 AM 2010 has been good to you so far. You're getting much better at this writing game. |
| Posted by Olivia Martin on 01/05/10 at 01:16 PM Amazing write! I must admit that I read the poem a few times in attempts to catch and reveal in the beauty of your images, but they are unique, just as your metaphors. This was a truly powerful piece - keep up the good work! |
| Posted by Michael Smith on 01/06/10 at 04:35 AM Damn straight! Preach on girl, I'm right behind you! Way to fuse the infinitesimally large with the infinitesimally small. |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 01/11/10 at 04:17 AM "stars in tight alliance"...ahh! that's beautiful. this is disgustingly, the epitome of...defining poetic in my mind. maybe i need to look into your library a bit deeper...? |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/12/10 at 04:38 AM "when scars are plateaus
and cliffs that remind me
to regress from regrets,
what striking imagery! Wonderful in its scope and brevity!
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| Posted by Allison Smith on 01/13/10 at 09:38 PM Great imagery in this piece! |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/15/10 at 06:52 PM As Michael says, this is a great blend of small-scale and large-scale and the relationships between -the universe is at your fingertips, all it takes to see it is the right perception! |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 01/16/10 at 07:53 PM That is a very good poignant question you posed in the last line. I love the way you ended this with THAT particular question. Excellent metaphorical conceptualization! |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/18/10 at 07:20 AM Lovely, powerful, vivd. I especially like the "inkstains" on fingertips part. But the rest are great to savor as well. Well done. |
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