| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Sarah Wolf on 01/04/10 at 06:27 AM I like the layout and shape among other things of this write. |
| Posted by Olivia Martin on 01/04/10 at 02:07 PM I loved this piece; Bravo! From the first stanza I truly enjoyed the fact that you weren't merely lamenting a lost love, but also taking "responsibility" for your part, and yet, by the end, there was truly hope for recovery. ;) The shape was also quite unique and definitely added another wonderful element to the piece. Great job! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 01/04/10 at 04:30 PM ...michael, this is super cool; you write for many that don't have the kahonies to admit that we do limit out universes to one, a significant one thereby limiting our Universe...coolest of cool on word usage-play, and the little HTMLness in the lay-out. |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 01/04/10 at 07:39 PM This poem comes from a very good and healthy idea (imho). Nobody is able to achieve this "unlimiting" completely, but the striving for such achievement is in itself a part of the liberation and a foundation for inner security.
Nice, Michael. Thanks. |
| Posted by Rachel Bennett on 01/04/10 at 10:38 PM There's something very real about this - thanks for the great poem! |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 01/05/10 at 02:31 AM Real. Honest. Unafraid to tell it like it is. Perfect layout. And easy to relate with, including the edge of sadness. |
| Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/06/10 at 12:33 AM Oh...this causes an ache -it is so lovely, so pained and so real. Beautifully done. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/06/10 at 04:10 AM Brilliant piece on pain so many of us know so well. Welcome back to Pathetic and remember, what doesn't kill does make you stronger (cliche but true)!!! |
| Posted by Amie Golda on 01/06/10 at 04:20 AM Very good visuals on this. It certainly helps set the tone and mood. Dramatic ending and the vivid imager at the beginning certainly sets thing aflame. Great write! |
| Posted by Allison Smith on 01/06/10 at 08:11 AM I remember this one! Thanks for reposting. |
| Posted by Matt Odell on 04/20/11 at 08:32 AM This is wonderful! |
| Posted by Laurie Blum on 04/20/11 at 01:01 PM I am so happy this was POTD! I was meant to see and read this today! I feltyour words deeply and could really appreciate the way your poem provides focus back to what is really important. Thanks for sharing with me. |
| Posted by Cathlyn Cartier on 04/21/11 at 01:36 AM The theme is eternal and the form lends so much. Timeless poetry! |
| Posted by Scott Utley on 03/12/12 at 09:09 PM brilliant berillaint what aman u are growing into - an iuol for the misbegotten - having said that,and that being said, may i say - and hate me if you wish take this master piece and cut the last line - 'or at least u could of been' - we know that - i love ya - don't hate me |
