You Will Be Broken

by Michael Smith

I find myself
still present amongst thee,
still left with much to accomplish.

'Tis not a pity but a shame
that I work not at breakneck pace,
and instead, have succumbed
to a practice of leisure and lackadaisicalness.

Apathy reveals to me an intriguing irony:
great attachments can conceive great apathy.

I desire not to be a dillydallying daisy,
chained within the incomprehensible plane.

Foul weather and rusted shackles - Begone!

No, I am not so delusional
that I believe my simple words make the way of my will
which is why, with great compassion,
I merely spell your doom and reveal your fate;

for you will be broken one way or another.


Author's Note:
Thanks goes out to Lauren Singer for teaching me the basics on how to "line" a poem =P
I know I have much more to learn.

Posted on 12/29/2009
Copyright © 2019 Michael Smith

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kimberly Bauer on 12/30/09 at 04:24 AM

Great Atachments can conceive great apathy . .. I have never thought about that but it is very true. Sometimes our blah state can come from an overdose of attachment. Love it!

Posted by John Herzog on 12/30/09 at 06:55 AM

This is a situation in which I find myself constantly. Thank you for depicting it so well, and you are quite the wordsmith!

Posted by Allison Smith on 01/01/10 at 05:03 AM

Good to see you finding your feet. 2009 was a hard year had by all.

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 01/02/10 at 02:47 AM

The I in this poem has to be a universal! The challenge to fight lethargy and inertia powerfully stated. The ending a depressive twist! Again striking in its intensity.

Posted by Olivia Martin on 01/06/10 at 11:37 AM

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, Michael. After reading your library "introduction," it's glad to see you writing again and in a better "place." Just remember, as you most certainly note, leisure isn't always a bad thing -- it allows time for reflection, healing, and growth. Great write.

Posted by Therese Elaine on 01/15/10 at 07:01 PM

I kept hearing that line in my head..."You have been weighed...you have been measured...and you have been found wanting." Now I'm going to hear "You will be broken" after it! Awesome piece my friend -and it looks like you take to lessons quite well!!

Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 01/23/10 at 04:39 AM

This reminds me very much of my reading of Ecclesiastes and Proverbs. An admitting of reality and a sense of longing to be more; but in fact the frailty of being human. Yes, we all have much to learn and I thank you for your words both in writing your pieces and your comments. You are truly wise. ~N

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