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Conscious Rhythms

by H.M Stevens

my heart steadily

scores unaware that my

mind steadily ticks

12/08/2009

Posted on 12/08/2009
Copyright © 2025 H.M Stevens

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Posted by V. Blake on 12/08/09 at 11:24 PM

I'm not sure that it wasn't intentional, but I I noticed that changing the word "Often" to something like "However" would make this a haiku. It's a syllable short as it stands. Regardless of form, it's still a fun read.

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