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this painting belongs to you
by Carissa DeweyThe fan's rotating beats
hang with my attention,
here I am
thoughts wrapped around you.
These empty beer bottles and
my slight haziness taking blame
for this ache-
and my
numb thoughts.
Outside it’s raining and a cool
breeze carries aromas
of a distant farm
against my bareness,
keeping me dull-
still
and I feel like I’m a brush stroke
hanging on your wall.
09/28/2009 Posted on 09/28/2009
Copyright © 2024 Carissa Dewey
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 09/29/09 at 02:43 AM Good one Carissa....CharMin |
| Posted by Steven Kenworthy on 09/30/09 at 03:17 AM this is excellent. is this the first time i've read your stuff? i'm going to read more. your style is elegant and stylish...if that makes sense. your fan beats...magnif. i read this three times, which i rarely ever do. you jammed a lot of feeling in this...i love it. |
| Posted by Shossana Dreyfus on 09/30/09 at 04:47 PM ... Gorgeous ... soft and gorgeous with underlined depth and strength ... I really like this. I may be VERY new at writing poetry, but have studied classics and know what I like. |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 10/01/09 at 02:09 PM Very nice Carissa. I don;t think I have read any of your poems before. I hope to see more! |
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