august twenty-third by Ava Blui can't write about a life i don't know:
your life of travel, patience and
never forgiveness for your sins
i can't write from your eyes
but i'd still love to see them. 08/24/2009 Posted on 08/24/2009 Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu
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Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 08/24/09 at 11:24 PM You don't have to write about a life you don't know. You've got a couple of universes worth of brilliant material on the life you do know. There's such a well-versed sense of want and hope in this. It's not in any way cheesy or overwrought. It's perfect in its honesty and simplicity. It knows that this is all that needs to be said. I love the hell out of this piece. |
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