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august second

by Ava Blu

in your town,
there is a small story
unfolding

a miracle merging
with the hairs on your arm,

and i will use my eyes
to enjoy the
outcome.

08/02/2009

Posted on 08/02/2009
Copyright © 2025 Ava Blu

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Joe Cramer on 08/02/09 at 11:25 PM

..... wonderful.....

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 08/03/09 at 03:39 AM

I keep going back to that second stanza. Without it, this would be a really simple (but still good), straightforward short poem, but that second stanza throws it into a wonderful, weird territory that gives an extra dimension that any other writer probably wouldn't be clever enough to think of.

Posted by Samiah Haque on 08/03/09 at 12:49 PM

there is something incredibly feminine about the tone of this poem--and the last stanza doesn't evoke the image of eyes, but lips.

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