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At The Bar

by Steve Baba

There it is
The walk
The smile
The sexy look in her eyes
What can I do
To keep from losing
My safety net?

07/31/2009

Author's Note: Tuesday night

Posted on 08/01/2009
Copyright © 2024 Steve Baba

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Alisa Js on 08/01/09 at 10:04 PM

Hello Steve, Nice to see you posting again. You have written one that many, if not millions can relate to on a personal level. For what it's worth,may I share with you what I heard in my head as I read through this? On L4, I heard..'That sexy look in her eyes' Wishing for you a fabulous week. alisa ;-)

Posted by Sam Richmond on 04/20/11 at 11:08 AM

Hi Steve; Being somewhat a fan of minimalist poetry, this was a pleasant find. I like everything about it. You get the job done with no clutter. You assure us that she is beautiful, alluring and that you are totally smitten. The closing is very powerful. It speaks volumes. Sam

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