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Magnetic #1

by Jon-Jacob F Deal

Bare and lazy
Swimming so playfully
Shining water all over our skin
Sleeping easy
Cool and breezy
One from the water where two went in.

01/01/2001

Posted on 06/20/2009
Copyright © 2024 Jon-Jacob F Deal

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kris Mara on 06/21/09 at 02:22 AM

I love when so few words can portray so much...this is lovely...and is uplifting to me today...

Posted by V. Blake on 06/24/09 at 04:45 AM

"One from the water where two went in" is an incredibly powerful note to end this on, and it's not something you see coming. The first four lines seem whimsical, and that last line manages to keep in step with them while simultaneously going beyond them. Really nice.

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