12 lazy haiku by Jim Benz
rising at dawn --
we can't even subdue
one mosquito
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cloud of gnats
down by the outhouse --
choke cherry blossoms
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morning fire --
listening to wrens
while the coffee boils
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down in the reeds
where we hid the canoe --
a noisy beaver
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like old times --
grouse in the aspen grove
drumming on logs
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a mindless task --
watching dragonflies mate
on the wood pile
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cloudburst --
squishing toes in the mud
as we bathe
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rainy afternoon --
rethinking the day
over backgammon
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lost in the woods --
craning our necks
to the sunset
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wet socks --
spending every match
on a single fire
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spring ritual --
naked in the firelight
killing ticks
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late night swim --
drowning in my whiskey cup
two mosquitos
05/27/2009 Posted on 05/27/2009 Copyright © 2024 Jim Benz
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 05/27/09 at 09:29 PM Awesome across the board. I'd have to say the first one being my favorite. |
Posted by Kris Mara on 05/28/09 at 12:21 PM it's great how these are strung together to detail the entire day -- in the economy of the format, you provide these wonderful and fully rounded snippets that paint such an immense picture...poetic and real, a combination I admire and enjoy |
Posted by Paganini Jones on 06/06/09 at 07:30 PM Mozzies and ticks - yuk! but this is a wonderfully evocative sequence of 'ku. I was there with you in mind and longed for holidy time to come :) |
Posted by Carissa Dewey on 06/18/09 at 12:21 AM jim, these are beautiful. makes me jealous of all of your simple experiences. defiantly creates a yearning to get out and get some nature. |
Posted by Sigurdur Haraldsson on 06/28/09 at 01:24 PM I wish my days were lazy like this... Splendid work, Jim. |
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