12 lazy haiku

by Jim Benz

rising at dawn --
we can't even subdue
one mosquito


cloud of gnats
down by the outhouse --
choke cherry blossoms


morning fire --
listening to wrens
while the coffee boils


down in the reeds
where we hid the canoe --
a noisy beaver


like old times --
grouse in the aspen grove
drumming on logs


a mindless task --
watching dragonflies mate
on the wood pile


cloudburst --
squishing toes in the mud
as we bathe


rainy afternoon --
rethinking the day
over backgammon


lost in the woods --
craning our necks
to the sunset


wet socks --
spending every match
on a single fire


spring ritual --
naked in the firelight
killing ticks


late night swim --
drowning in my whiskey cup
two mosquitos


Posted on 05/27/2009
Copyright © 2022 Jim Benz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 05/27/09 at 09:29 PM

Awesome across the board. I'd have to say the first one being my favorite.

Posted by Kris Mara on 05/28/09 at 12:21 PM

it's great how these are strung together to detail the entire day -- in the economy of the format, you provide these wonderful and fully rounded snippets that paint such an immense picture...poetic and real, a combination I admire and enjoy

Posted by Paganini Jones on 06/06/09 at 07:30 PM

Mozzies and ticks - yuk! but this is a wonderfully evocative sequence of 'ku. I was there with you in mind and longed for holidy time to come :)

Posted by Carissa Dewey on 06/18/09 at 12:21 AM

jim, these are beautiful. makes me jealous of all of your simple experiences. defiantly creates a yearning to get out and get some nature.

Posted by Sigurdur Haraldsson on 06/28/09 at 01:24 PM

I wish my days were lazy like this... Splendid work, Jim.

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