The image here is strong stuff and definitely has a good element of being quite stark, effective and even a little chilling, but I have to admit that it feels like something might be missing, like a couple of details are missing, and what's here, as good as it is, is not quite complete. I don't know. I could be absolutely off the mark. Again, I do really like the here and now. There's a great sense of agelessness to this woman, as though she's been haunting the streets of her city for years. It's terrific stuff.

reading this i feel as though she is also screaming as she contorts her body but it's--the frequency--only a few birds acknowledge her shriek and fly and her pain resonates. the 'incompleteness' of this piece is what i think adds most to its style, the raw yearning. either way, this is a strong, powerful write.