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lucky number seven
by Ava Blui still haven’t explained the story
for this ring on my hand,
or the reasons for not saying hello
i may not have an explanation for each diamond,
each band around my finger,
but i bet no one is waiting around for it
the assumptions,
the realizations
that something else could be a mystery
are enough to drive the right person away
i haven’t been searching for anything,
haven’t tried my luck downtown,
but something tells me you’re my lucky number seven
i didn’t believe in chance,
fate
or any other such nonsense
but i’m turning over a new page,
using a new pen
and i think you just might be
my one-way ticket out of
town.
04/08/2009 Author's Note: when i play, i'm always all in
Posted on 04/09/2009
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 04/09/09 at 02:37 AM I really like the simple, gentle approach you take to this one. There's a very nicely done, quiet hope to this that never gets sappy or too sentimental. It's honest and direct, as is always the case with your work. Wonderful stuff. |
| Posted by Colleen Sperry on 04/09/09 at 03:03 AM I really enjoyed this.. the first stanza was wonderful!! |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 04/09/09 at 03:19 AM ...that message was addressed to me, right? man, i know what paranoics feel--it being all about them...you write a hugable pome here, so soft, yet cutting[the right depth as to get one's attention...naw really, sorry to be so long, this is a day in the life of just about anyone...makes it fit each reader...just wow on some of your lines/awarenesses... |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 04/13/09 at 07:20 PM This piece flows very well. It's not brutal, but soft and sensual and I like seeing these kind of feelings from you. |
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