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i wish i could repaint the world
by Ava Bluthe world seems to be too yellow
for my tastes
the harvest moon,
the pollen,
the way my sister’s hair shines in the sun
yellow seems to be overrated,
the symbol for happiness
I think the symbol best be less than bright
to hold my feelings inside
but don’t think of it as depressing,
as if I am drawn to black;
it’s much more about the annoyance, really,
than it is about the color itself
the way it draws people in,
the way it encourages you to smile;
it’s all too demanding
I’d rather be in the corner,
delicately surrounded by a pale cobalt blue:
not too flashy,
not too “come hither,”
just enough to entice you over
this should be the symbol for happiness
when the world wants us to be emerged into a crowd;
sometimes the best strangers meet
only under the pale blue moon
in some corner of the world.
03/12/2009 Posted on 03/12/2009
Copyright © 2024 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 03/12/09 at 04:00 PM This is definitely some interesting territory for you. I'm not sure what it is about this one that's so different from a lot of your other work. It might be the voice. It definitely seems to be coming from a different place. In any case, I love it. I especially like the last three stanzas. |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 03/12/09 at 04:46 PM Cobalt blue corner for a poet named Blu where poetry is shared sounds like my type of happy place as well, I think the world is to yellow as well and I prefer a less harsh brightness so I relate and I like. smh |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 03/12/09 at 05:19 PM this poem makes me think of spring and the pretty blue sky, day or night, and just how right you are when it comes to the possibilities that can happen under them. love the use of color in this too. stunning as usual. |
| Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 03/12/09 at 09:02 PM holy cow! i thought i was the only one who felt this way! |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 03/13/09 at 04:32 AM We all have our own shades I think... That last stanza lingers like a story itching to be told... Love it. |
| Posted by Timothy Wilson on 03/15/09 at 08:44 AM This is good. love the concept of it all. The last stanza was like a cliffhanger from hell. Wanted badly to read more but it's cool and tied it together must agree that there is too much yellow... |
| Posted by Jason Moskalyk on 03/15/09 at 11:59 PM Thank you, honestly. This poem does me just fine. |
| Posted by Tom Goss on 03/18/09 at 06:01 PM Brought smoothly to a lovely simmer, then ended with a knock-out. You really know the rhythm and flow. |
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