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Running out of Breath
by Arianna WoodsI spent so long drinking
That I started to drown
Spent so much time smoking
My lungs gave out
But I quit
I quit everything
I even quit quitting
03/02/2009 Author's Note: I even quit this poem.
Posted on 03/02/2009
Copyright © 2025 Arianna Woods
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 03/02/09 at 09:08 PM Nah. I won't lie and say that this is your best, but it's still a nice little shot of introspection. I honestly thought you were going for something tongue-in-cheek here. In any case, it's not great, but it still works well. The first four lines are actually quite good and would serve well starting off a better poem. |
| Posted by Paul Marino on 03/02/09 at 09:51 PM aw. it's tops |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 03/06/09 at 02:45 AM Fun to read but I quit reading. ~(8^D)=...CharMin |
| Posted by Eric Seligmann on 11/18/10 at 10:42 PM Short, sweet, and to the point. Some of the best stuff is exactly that. Thumbs up. |
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