Across a Room

by Roger J Kenyon

My eyes met yours
empty and unresponsive;
I tried free will
and a smile to bring
you over to no avail.
Now the only time
our eyes meet
is when mine are
closed and I'm alone.


Posted on 12/27/2008
Copyright © 2023 Roger J Kenyon

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/27/08 at 05:53 PM

Nice and quite well said.

Posted by Nancy Ames on 12/27/08 at 07:43 PM

This is a very nicely poetic take on that split-second contact between people - we can all relate to this one.

Posted by A. Paige White on 01/30/09 at 03:48 AM

This one is as haunting as the cry of a wolf crying for the moon. Very good, solid wrenching ending.

Posted by Kristine Briese on 11/07/10 at 02:22 PM

So heart-wrenching. A beautiful piece of writing.

Posted by Steve Michaels on 11/08/10 at 12:55 AM

Congrats on POTD!

Posted by Doreen Cavazza on 05/21/11 at 04:40 PM

I know this feeling well. Nice job. My only suggestion is about the punctuation. There shouldn't be a period after "meet". A semi-colon or period after "unresponsive" would work. It's short but very sweet - it brings out the emotion of the sentiment very well.

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