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by Anastasia Selby

Today was quiet and I was quiet.
The grackles weighed down the branches of the trees
with their long tails and
oval bodies,
they flew across the Wal-Mart parking lot and settled
on the various SUV's, pooping on them,
unselfconsciously.

The sound of them reminds me of so many
things I haven't even had the chance to
ruminate on,
I can feel the memories forming
with each movement of my eyes,
sweep across the concrete,
sweep across the sky.

10/23/2008

Author's Note: Just trying to get back in the groove. The grackles fascinate me. Stephan, I took your advice. Thank you.

Posted on 10/24/2008
Copyright © 2025 Anastasia Selby

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Stephan Anstey on 10/24/08 at 01:45 PM

This shows a lot of promise. If might suggest, the last two lines should probably be cut and used as the title. Also, the first stanza seems like it should be a separate poem I think. I really love the middle stanza, I think the grackle bit is wonderful.

Posted by Joe Cramer on 10/24/08 at 02:39 PM

... the imagery here is outstanding.....

Posted by Christina Bruno on 10/27/08 at 12:56 AM

your imagery is excellent and the reptition of the last line is very effective

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