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Sweet Surrender

by Tony Whitaker

espresso warms my morning cup

i sip stunning scenes serene

gazing at green pristine pastures

from my chair on balcony



cows appear to be praying

as their big-eyed faces

rip

at the morning grass

their large, ribbon-tied bells

peels, in the still

of the cool dawn air

here in Swiss Elsass



i draw a view across dewy meadow

see ravens gathering in distant trees

always bullying their way in

for these sneaky, snobbish corvines

never feast with a friend



a sound of hooves upon the path

a local farmer in leisure passes

smiles, and waves as he walks

his cart so full of his harvest

by worn, but hardy, hands

to feed the local masses


i lived this life when i was young

then this bitter-sweet breeze blew in,

and soon became this, city man

faced the years of pacing,

like a lion in a cage

just like all the others

at the zoo



Now I give thanks

for feeling free again

living life anew

and if you ever decide

to come this way

won't you join me for a few?

10/16/2008

Author's Note: This is such a rewrite from the original since I took some real time to get my real feelings into it. I hope you like it.

Posted on 10/16/2008
Copyright © 2024 Tony Whitaker

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/17/08 at 06:14 AM

Many good things in this poem, I don't remember the other, but I like the contrasts in this very much, the surprises such as the cows "rip". The contrasts mirror the dichotomy city-country, too.

Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 11/14/08 at 08:53 PM

Hey Tony. This is a really fine write. The images are wonderful, peaceful, pastoral. So, as cliché as it may be I will say, cheers to you and let's have another round. And if your bottle's empty, my poetic-brother, drink from mine: here's to life, and to the poetry of it all, that gets us from one day to the next. Happy to have found this and even more so to suggest its designation as a fine potd. Fav+. Delighted. Thanks.

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