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by Dani Rosei know dates now,
ask me--
the 25th,the 2nd,
its october now.
the days are cooler,
air is cleaner.
if dared to feel,
i would feel
the draining absence
of minutes, as
they dwindle
with reckless abandon.
i know them
intimately now,
though they regard me
as being
of no consequence--
i covet them as
lovers would
the breaking light
of dawn,
signifying a night
of well-spent
exertion.
i know dates now.
monotonous thing,
keeping time
like it may be
lost forever
if i don't.
10/03/08 10/15/2008 Posted on 10/15/2008
Copyright © 2025 Dani Rose
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 10/15/08 at 11:59 PM Ah yes, 'time'. It is the subject for those of us that have little left and that was true when we were younger but we never knew it. Nice write and keep thinking about 'time'. 60 seconds lost is a minute out of your life. It adds up quicker than you think. |
| Posted by David Hill on 10/16/08 at 02:11 AM We try to live in the moment, but can't keep from counting the loss. Nice piece. The tone in the last stanza is exceptional |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/16/08 at 04:37 AM I love that last stanza. Absolutely right on the money. Beautifully captured. |
| Posted by Sarah Wolf on 10/16/08 at 07:10 PM This is sorta how I feel about pictures... |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 10/17/08 at 02:00 PM ... awesome... the title drew me in, your wonderful words kept me entranced... an excellent write... welcome to Pathetic..... |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 10/21/08 at 06:25 PM i know that feeling of trying to hold on to time. i look forward to reading more of your work! i moved to tampa from biloxi. |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 10/21/08 at 11:38 PM ...my month my day my year, and to all of no consequence, gal, this is heavy and i like heavy...lovely sway to this... |
| Posted by Charles E Minshall on 10/22/08 at 04:47 AM This one I really like. Well done....CharMin |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/27/08 at 02:50 AM I suppose if time is finite, and in terms of the number of breaths we have in this one body, it is...dates (the coming and going of them) are definitely relevant. Personally, I loathe having to keep track of time :-) |
| Posted by CM Bauer on 10/29/08 at 12:10 AM Dani, you've certainly captured my attention. Amazing write. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 03/02/09 at 04:01 PM congrats on POTD. |
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