A Waking Dream by Alisa Jsthe more time I spend with you
the more I want to
dangerously close, I know
a tender soul, you came to me
so patiently.
your heart, a gift
presented
silver key of hope
is what I see,
dare I accept
and walk into,
a waking dream
this intrigue
09/12/2008 Posted on 09/13/2008 Copyright © 2025 Alisa Js
Member Comments on this Poem |
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 09/13/08 at 02:23 PM You might be missing a word in line one or two. Otherwise, beautiful. |
Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/13/08 at 05:13 PM ...don't know when you penned this one but it seems a 'stonger-yet wondering?' question to the Everyman him and yet there's a strengh in the wonderment...should i go? should not?...the woman perspective seem bolder in this one, definintely a likable strong woman too...should you?...mmmmmmaybe, life is a one-ride per person, annnd one turn. stout lil' two stanzas |
Posted by Steve Baba on 11/26/08 at 01:38 AM Beautiful poem. Stuck in my head! |
Posted by Rhonda Maneki on 04/07/10 at 06:55 AM Love you, love your writing * ding dong* I'm calling:) |
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