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A Waking Dream

by Alisa Js

the more time I spend with you
the more I want to
dangerously close, I know
a tender soul, you came to me
so patiently.
your heart, a gift
presented

silver key of hope
is what I see,
dare I accept
and walk into,
a waking dream
this intrigue …

09/12/2008

Posted on 09/13/2008
Copyright © 2021 Alisa Js

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 09/13/08 at 02:23 PM

You might be missing a word in line one or two. Otherwise, beautiful.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 09/13/08 at 05:13 PM

...don't know when you penned this one but it seems a 'stonger-yet wondering?' question to the Everyman him and yet there's a strengh in the wonderment...should i go? should not?...the woman perspective seem bolder in this one, definintely a likable strong woman too...should you?...mmmmmmaybe, life is a one-ride per person, annnd one turn. stout lil' two stanzas

Posted by Steve Baba on 11/26/08 at 01:38 AM

Beautiful poem. Stuck in my head!

Posted by Rhonda Maneki on 04/07/10 at 06:55 AM

Love you, love your writing * ding dong* I'm calling:)

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