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so much for summer
by Meghan Helmichsuited bodies leaning on palms,
overwhelmed and breathing heavy.
beaches with bathwater, hazel waves
falling all over themselves.
overwhelmed and breathing heavy -
sweaty hands folded into mountains,
falling all over themselves.
pink seams are bursting with
sweaty hands, folded into mountains.
forgotten plans still wide-eyed with sleep.
pink seams are bursting with
melted crayons and freshly painted
forgotten plans - still. wide-eyed with sleep,
the small warm faces turn to shade
melted crayons. and freshly painted,
suited bodies lean on palms. 07/18/2008 Author's Note: my first pantoum.
Posted on 07/18/2008
Copyright © 2025 Meghan Helmich
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 07/18/08 at 08:09 PM ...meghan, stylistics aside, which is *smack-0* by itself as a pantoum, but m'lady i love the lilt of the summer the way you've dressed it...a true summer written in a tight style...mmm |
| Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 07/23/08 at 08:17 PM Definitely the feel of summer at the sea shore! |
| Posted by Ken Harnisch on 07/24/08 at 04:45 AM Meghan, it's obvious you've got style..:) |
| Posted by Phil P Robson on 11/04/09 at 11:03 PM Not only very clever but also wonderful imagery and flow. |
| Posted by Carolyn Coville on 02/14/10 at 06:28 AM Nice! I can definitely feel the Florida humidity and breeze |
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