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ice queen

by Mary Frances Spencer

her cold
icy fingers
upon
your cheek

winter
dangles
icicle earrings

shimmers
in crystalline
gowns
hair rains
black clouds

adorns fluffy
ermine edges

she slices
dagger winds
piercing thin veils
howls
with the restless
pacing wolves

cracks the sky
in places
with a sharp
crisp

whip

beautiful
ethereal
both still and fluid

slips on the boots
and freezes

until the
melt


12/27/2007

Author's Note: Title ideas anyone? A name for her maybe? BRRRRR it's cold tonight...and I live in LA, CA! MFS

Posted on 12/27/2007
Copyright © 2024 Mary Frances Spencer

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Tony Whitaker on 12/27/07 at 12:22 PM

Well, since you live in LA the most obvious is LA Woman, but I'm a Doors fan too! As always I love your free form succinct style and your testament to what so many men know so well, an Ice Queen.

Posted by Genevieve Sturrock on 12/27/07 at 01:36 PM

this actually brought to mind the white witch from the lion, the witch, and the wardrobe whose real name was jadis. great write!

Posted by Sophia Grace on 12/27/07 at 02:33 PM

I like this one a lot! And I agree with Genevieve -- this brought Jadis to mind for me. Or Szepasszony who, in Hungarian lore, seduced young men and would dance in storms and hail showers. Very nicely done.

Posted by Sigurdur Haraldsson on 12/30/07 at 10:29 AM

I was reminded of the Ice Queen from H.C. Andersen's fairy tale.
In Iceland, it is the male aspect that rules the wind and frost. The frost biter is called Kuldaboli (lit. coldbull or frostbull) in Icelandic. I have a challenge for you :) Can you write a male version of this?
Btw, still another gem from you, always a pleasure to read.

Posted by Charlie Morgan on 12/30/07 at 09:52 PM

...mFs, the title is already good enough[to eat], pero, maybe as some of the other peeps suggested names, mayhaps you could incorporate them[her(s)]in a couple of stanzas, i like, i like...as it is, peace, chaz

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