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Hidden
by Richard VincePainting yourself as you wish to be
In all those wistful words, you hide
The real you behind trembling hands
That only partially cover your face,
Giving a tantalising hint of who you are.
I see beauty, but I cannot stop
Visualising your eyes as those of
A ghost: wild yet unmoving,
Empty yet baleful. They are eyes
I imagine always being turned to face
The ground, or your feet, or paper.
So many things I want to tell you
Clamour for attention in my mind,
But I know I could never convince you
To believe me. How can I know what
I have not seen?
With every tick of the clock,
My fascination has grown, and
My speculation has grown with it.
My imagination is doomed to veer
Further from reality since I cannot
Know enough to fill the gaps.
So I try to learn you from your
Carefully chosen words, through
Characters created of you, and
From almost unrecognisable pictures,
Even though I know I will
Never succeed.
12/09/2007 Posted on 12/09/2007
Copyright © 2024 Richard Vince
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 12/09/07 at 10:18 PM ...and that success would inevitably bring surcease. Perhaps ironic that this piece exudes a wistful air. Painting...almost unrecognisable pictures - overall a fine example of 'joined-up writing' in its literary sense :) |
| Posted by Erin Jones on 12/10/07 at 04:59 AM A beautiful poem. So amazing. I love it. So full of longing. "Visualising your eyes as those of/A ghost: wild yet unmoving,/Empty yet baleful." I love those lines. It's amazing. Keep up the good work. :) |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 12/10/07 at 07:07 AM Your observations of this person create their own mystery, and the effect is haunting. And, there seems to be an nonspecifically expressed ache that creates a longing of its own, a beauty rare that most might pass over. So wonderful. |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 12/11/07 at 05:19 AM I think the general concensus is that we women love your poem... And rightly so, I feel, but then I would, as one of 'we women'... It is quite a beautiful longing. |
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