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by Frank Lee

Jenny met Johnny on a whim.

Johnny was my boy
from East Mississippi;
he used to always call me 'Slim'.

I Hadn't spoke with Johnny since 99'
when we were out fishin, sharin beers
havin a good time.

I wrote him postcards
But never knew he wasnÂ’t home.
Whenever I tried to call him a girl answered the phone.

Johnny joined the army when he was 19.

Got fired from his job
for smoking some weed.
Had to choose between the armed forces or jail

Johnny never knew he was signing up for hell.
Jenny stayed at home
Waiting for his calls

Johnny never told me about Jenny (never had the balls)

Jenny was my first
Back when we were both pre-teens.
We were just kids

Stuck in-between
Not knowing what to do or how to act
I was in love though, thatÂ’s a fact.

Jenny was a looker and a flirt.

I was a bit cocky
And definitely a jerk.
She broke my heart and

I never looked back.
Johnny met her while he was on leave
Home from Iraq.

Jenny had a feeling that this day would come.

The first time we met we both felt numb.
I hugged her and
Neither of us could speak.

We shared a love for Johnny
He was very unique.
After years of silence

I held Jenny at JohnnyÂ’s wake.

12/06/2007

Posted on 12/07/2007
Copyright © 2024 Frank Lee

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/07/07 at 03:36 AM

Really well done short story vibe to this thing. But it's still very much a poem.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/07/07 at 04:05 AM

You're right. This does flow better. Interestingly enough though, I still get a short story vibe. Doesn't make it any less of a good poem though.

Posted by A. Paige White on 12/07/07 at 04:06 AM

Whew. Tough finish on this. You knew the slam was coming but it still hit hard with your wording.

Posted by Julie Adams on 12/07/07 at 03:09 PM

I love this piece, the poem strolls and enraptures you as you read on...the subjects in the piece are alive, breathing between your words...the development is emotionally satisfying for me as a reader, there is some closure in it's coming full circle, even if sad...loved the opening!!——"Jenny met Johnny on a whim.// Johnny was my boy/ from East Mississippi;/ he used to always call me 'Slim'."---all the best, peace, jewels

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