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Paradise Lost

by Brian Francis

Well I’ve stood in the line
Awaiting salvation
Body and blood
Wafer and wine
Confessed all my sins
Without exception
And still was left seeking
Some secretive sign
I’ve read all the words
That the good book offers
Listened to teachers
From some other time
Cried at the news
Of the salvation
Body and blood
The symbol the sign
I’ve claimed to be loyal
Yet then found misgivings
Doubts interceded
Salvation the cost
Yearned for the time
The well spring of passion
Closed off by reason
Paradise lost


Posted on 12/01/2007
Copyright © 2024 Brian Francis

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Charles M Harrison on 12/01/07 at 07:30 PM

I love the way this flows, very musical.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 12/02/07 at 05:51 PM

Strong, cohesive, intelligent statement, the imagery you've used and the repetition of "sign" is very effective. "Stood in the line" is one example of how concise and strong the poem is, giving it an actual "waiting" feeling and progression and "salvation the cost" links up there too, in a wry way. This has sense of sculpted, well crafted verse, really intent, and the result of thought out experience, some of the reasons I like it so much!

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