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i shiver for you
by Ava Blu
it is never for nothing,
your feelings becoming limbs
reaching towards my face
it is hard for me to breathe
these days
as the humidity tramples over my voice
but i answer when you call
you draw the best of me,
believing in beauty
i can hardly feel
with the windows closed,
but i keep them open
every time we talk
you are the one thing i cannot hold
yet the very thing needed the most
i would miss you
even if we never meet
because there is something in the way
you laugh.
10/14/2007 Posted on 10/14/2007
Copyright © 2025 Ava Blu
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/14/07 at 09:40 PM Everything is beautiful in this. your "shivers"..."feelings becoming limbs" can do that...the "humidity" is real here--yes. you create--mirror the intimacy, I love the "windows" and how you "keep them open every time we talk"... I would not hold back from such intensity-- hold that "laugh" closer if you can... and write more than "shiver"s perhaps? A beautiful piece, a sequence would be beautiful. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 10/15/07 at 03:44 AM I wish I could bring that out in someone. I don't think there's any aspect of love that you can't capture brilliantly. |
| Posted by Cristy M. on 12/06/07 at 02:27 PM there is this line you wrote that makes me think of bjork's song "miss you" from the album "post." track 9. i think you'll like it. you and she are totally getting each other right now. |
| Posted by Jo Halliday on 07/26/09 at 01:46 AM Unmatched expression; trimmed down to what is absolutely essential! |
| Posted by Matthew Sharp on 08/28/10 at 07:59 AM sometimes we laugh to keep from crying...beautiful poem:)
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