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Destiny's Plea
by Alisa Jsand what if I needed you, my love
to be strong if I wavered inside
unsure of these steps, shaky at best
would you wrap your strong arms around me,
assuring us all would be well
that together, we'd make it, somehow
telling me you understood my heartache
my issues with trust,
my history with you ...
are you ready to face this reality
blow past misunderstandings, misspoken words
can we rise above the furor besides
that threatens with menacing eyes,
can we try once again
to soar higher,
confident of one thing and that's us,
regardless ...
we now hold this flicker of flame, so tender
seeking to know the wonder,
struggling to face life's uncertainties
tainted, without a doubt
yet willing to explore
bust open that door,
we've both run to and previously paused ...
watching our wishes glide on a feather
almost beyond our reach
but not completely,
take my hand
hold my heart,
be the man I know and desire
I'll be the woman your dreams speak of,
and together we'll flow
where we need to be
we'll take our time,
grateful for destinys plea ...
09/18/2007 Posted on 09/19/2007
Copyright © 2024 Alisa Js
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 09/19/07 at 01:53 AM Alisa, I just wrote a long, wonderful crit, then it got deleted. aarrggh! So here's the second one. Your words flow so well in this stream-of-consciousness. Two suggestions - start with "what" instead of "and." In the last stanza, change "one" to "woman." Your words make this plea an invitation to someone either special or that you want to know better to take a journey into not only what's known, but also to the unknown and discover it together. Beautiful.
~Chelle~
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| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 09/19/07 at 03:12 AM I can see why you directed me towards this. One of your best, easily. |
| Posted by Rhonda Maneki on 09/19/07 at 03:23 AM I'm back! I found this and marveled...it's wonderful to see the light of you shine brilliant...
**much love** R |
| Posted by Tony Whitaker on 09/19/07 at 07:50 AM As usual your soul shine comes through in this wondrous plea! |
| Posted by Steve Baba on 12/15/08 at 08:18 AM This poem really made me think. Good thoughts! I really like reading your poems. So vivid... |
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