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by Jason Wardell

We
minimize
we

we have minimal text we
we revise erase avoid we

we part of our some

we divided by we
we diminish we

desecrated we
amputeed we
simplified we

clarify we

we walking at night, only encountering
other minimized--chain-smoking and
muttering, desperately wandering towards
change

we desperate

we clinging to sheets and sheets, sweat
and ink-stained, raving delirious beauty,
desirously groping for connection

we disconnected

we discontented.

09/02/2007

Author's Note: I'm trying.

"Amputated" is an ugly-sounding word and I do not like it.

First in a series of indeterminate length called "minimalism" with a visual element as well. It's a lofty goal for someone who hasn't written at all, let alone regularly, in a long while. We will see.

Published April 2010 in Metrosphere, Metropolitan State College of Denver's art and literary journal.

Posted on 09/03/2007
Copyright © 2022 Jason Wardell

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Ava Blu on 09/03/07 at 03:22 AM

we believe trying is enough.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 09/03/07 at 04:32 AM

Love the contrast and dynamic of this...minimize while maximize with "raving delirious beauty"--yes.

Posted by Nadia Gilbert Kent on 09/04/07 at 03:49 AM

I'm glad you're revving up... this is sweet. "Amputated" didn't bother me, but I don't think it's an especially ugly word. "Moist" is an ugly word. "Groin" as well. On another note, you can be comforted with the knowing that your first attempt conveys much more than most do after long dry spells and your style carries your sentiments nicely, however unsatisfactory. I think this would fall easily from the tongue. I also think you'll look at it a year from now and like it more than you currently do.

Posted by Therese Elaine on 09/06/07 at 11:40 PM

Sweat and ink stained -a gorgeous line...this is really good writing -I like how it movies, both fluid and jagged at the same time, sharp angles but a steady stream. Plummy.

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