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it's all just a little bit of history repeating
by Brynn Dizacki love you but i think it's over. i mean,
i think it ended
that night, while we were
waiting for the teeter flowers to come
and make our choices for a little while.
i think it's something you've been trying to tell me
for a long time.
but disconect
ing is harder
when you are clos
e.
some
times
i remem
ber how we
were.
and how much
i love
d
you.
a cluster of a thousand birds is
breaking and dissolving slowly into
the sky. it must be so lovely to be
removed from this chaos,.
to make that choice. 06/11/2007 Author's Note:
this is not my strongest writing. but, this is not my strongest time, either.
Posted on 06/12/2007
Copyright © 2024 Brynn Dizack
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Anita Mac on 06/12/07 at 03:37 AM It's certainly not your weakest writing... It's just not your usual these days. It's quite good, though. I'm sorry things are so tough, take care of yourself. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 06/12/07 at 04:03 AM I think it's really strong. Though to be honest, I see its greatest strength as maybe being a spoken word sort of deal. But I could be completely wrong on that. In any case, it's great work. |
| Posted by Meghan Helmich on 08/14/08 at 04:46 PM i like the way you separate 'love' and 'd' with that line break. i always try to explain away the fact that love and loved are so close. you said it much easier than i have. |
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