|
running on empty by Jim Benz(how does this happen?)
today,
and every day
for the last several permutations, I am
the embodiment
of emptiness, a multi-dimensional
emptiness, a reduction
of excess
into dubious song, unsung
in dimensions of bliss.
(I put string theory to shame.)
today, as I've long
suspected, I might
curl up and disappear,
or I might stumble
into an unmentionable zone
of perhaps, or instead
I might go outside
and wander aimlessly, blinded
by the light of day.
(yeah, blinded.)
I think I'm on the verge
of discovering a new realism
of invisible dimension
in my black heart, a dimension
of the aimless quandary,
inherently amiss.
Indeed, today I'm on the cusp
of charting new trajectories
to the absolute
(freezing point)
of worthlessness. in time,
I'll make time stand still
and pay attention
while I stumble
into a drive-by shooting
or a lake or oncoming traffic or
perhaps I'll just keep on
walking
until my feet give out.
(incidentally, walking is heaven.)
so, now I propose
that everyone should walk more
and care less.
further, I have come
to the conclusion that poetry
is for the birds.
unfortunately, there are
very few birds who edit reputable
journals or even read.
(they sing very nicely though.) 06/11/2007 Author's Note: inspired by the latest rejection note received from a poetry journal. Normally, I shrug them off but this one really put me in a funk. I think I'll take that walk now.
Posted on 06/11/2007 Copyright © 2026 Jim Benz
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/11/07 at 05:48 PM Oh my, this sounds like a moment of temporary insanity. Yep, sounds like all my days. ;-) The "conclusion" in the last stanza and line made me laugh. Only one suggestion - instead of using parentheses, put those lines in italics instead.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Dan Kasten on 06/12/07 at 03:44 PM If I saved all my rejection notices, I could wallpaper my bedroom. People are blinded by perceptions and suffer from pigeon-holing when reading the works of others. I've been dinged twice by Hanging Loose Press in NY, only to discover they have "pet" people. Don't give up. It's just a matter of time... |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 06/13/07 at 04:44 PM If (your) poetry is for the birds then I'm flying right over to take a bath in it. And one day, I'll have to wait in line, Jim. You're too brilliant. That's what (it) is. |
| Posted by Laura Doom on 06/13/07 at 07:16 PM Well, I can say, without pride, that I've never received a rejection note :) Although, it has to be said it goes without saying...
A generous emptiness, in the context. My suggestion - send this to the journal as your response. (Does my naiveté show?) |
| Posted by Sandy M. Humphrey on 06/14/07 at 09:03 PM Rejection by some but acceptance by poets pathetic who can feel your pain and either know your expierence or have never even tried to submit..so take that walk and then share some more of your emptiness until you feel full again. well done. smh* |
| Posted by Ashley Lane on 06/26/07 at 01:38 AM "so, now I propose
that everyone should walk more
and care less."
If nothing else, at least the rejection inspired turns of phrase like this. Overall I liked it.
|
|