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The Astor Court Garden

by Julie Adams

I listen,
subtle waters trickle
between rockery crevices

the Koi pond ripples with energy, flickers
of gold, orange, and white
weaving beneath

movement massages their fine scales
as a mild breeze does our skin
in May

 
               ~

where steps form, moss hangs on
and shrubbery offer their version of spring green,
a shrine rises from jagged boulders

cherry wood intricasies dangle like lace runners
along the sloping peaks of the Pagoda,
its pillars envelope the temple

subdued, yellow lanterns
blink like watchful eyes of ancestors
in the temple shadows

             ~

the garden is quiet, still
thoughts move like spring butterflies
spring air stirs between

the bounty of earth and awe
glimmer on the water,
like a distant sunset shedding its colors

06/08/2007

Posted on 06/08/2007
Copyright © 2024 Julie Adams

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 06/09/07 at 04:10 AM

I'd say it's in pretty damn good shape right now. I can't wait to see how this can possibly can better.

Posted by Charles M Harrison on 06/13/07 at 09:16 AM

I like it the way it is. Paints a very good picture. I just close my eyes and I can see it in my mind.

Posted by David R Spellman on 07/12/07 at 09:21 PM

Also have to say that it is great as is... striking imagery and thout provoking. Good stuff in all!

Posted by David R Spellman on 07/12/07 at 09:22 PM

maybe even "thought" provoking... [;0)~

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 11/04/07 at 01:29 AM

Your description is vivid with colorful images, implications of worship and serenity are subtlely stated.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 11/05/07 at 04:23 PM

I love the intricacy of your vision, the elements set forth as if painted, and the language "ripples with energy"!

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