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I was taken

by Patricia J Reed

You had eyes
Of cool water
And I was parched

They struck me
Like being socked in the stomach
In a school fight

They aroused emotions
That left me flushed
And shamefully smiling

These feelings had to be sinful

Yet late at night
Innocently sleeping
I had dreams
Where I desired to be with you

06/06/2007

Author's Note: This is missing something - i'm not sure what yet. So it's probably not finished!

Posted on 06/07/2007
Copyright © 2024 Patricia J Reed

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 06/07/07 at 02:34 AM

I like this, especially the second stanza, but for some reason, and you can ignore me on this, I feel like this could use another stanza. I'm not sure where though. Maybe, somewhere between the second and third stanzas. I could be totally wrong on this, because it's still a really great piece. I just have this weird feeling that just a little more can be said.

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