| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 05/29/07 at 04:00 PM The more I learn about haiku the more I appreciate your sensitivity and skill. The season element, one of the keys that unlocks the haiku--in your writing is subtle and potent. In the first the cherry blossoms alone signal the time of year. In the second, I think it's the chirping sparrows. The syllable counts in English just need to be low, as you demonstrate. (Japanese and Chinese syllables work so differently and I really see that the 5-7-5, while fun to play with sometimes is verbose in English.) Your haiku shimmer with their condensation and wonder. |