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two haiku

by Jim Benz



wind, cherry blossoms –
so many months
before fruit


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sparrows chirping –
the cat
lifts up his ear

05/25/2007

Posted on 05/25/2007
Copyright © 2026 Jim Benz

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 05/25/07 at 03:35 PM

Love the cat observation.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 05/26/07 at 04:11 AM

Signs of spring in delicate verse. I like these paired together. Two different ones, yet they are some of my favorites. I bought some cherries today - yummy - they're delicious.
~Chelle~

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 05/28/07 at 08:40 PM

Not the form of haiku I am acquainted with but very focused and descriptive.

Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 05/29/07 at 04:00 PM

The more I learn about haiku the more I appreciate your sensitivity and skill. The season element, one of the keys that unlocks the haiku--in your writing is subtle and potent. In the first the cherry blossoms alone signal the time of year. In the second, I think it's the chirping sparrows. The syllable counts in English just need to be low, as you demonstrate. (Japanese and Chinese syllables work so differently and I really see that the 5-7-5, while fun to play with sometimes is verbose in English.) Your haiku shimmer with their condensation and wonder.

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