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Claustrophobic
by Ymelda Ramirezi
cant
breathe
feelingtrappedbyallthatsurroundsme
who
am
i
icantspeakforidonotknowwords
only
emot
ions
emotionsidonotunderstand
each
impulse
brings
paintomychest
pret
endingwitheverybreath
FORCEDtoBEsomeoneIamNOT
for fear of standing up for who i really am
the TRUTH hidesintheshadows
beaten
down
with
each
spoken
emotion
THERE lieswhatwasleftof ME
withering away
inthedarkness
04/18/2007 Author's Note: I hope you can understand this. I was trying something different to complete the mood I was in when I wrote this.
Posted on 04/19/2007
Copyright © 2024 Ymelda Ramirez
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Cristy M. on 12/05/07 at 06:50 PM trying different things is well worth it. i would try to modify this style and work around it. it has a great sonic quality and an imposed prosody when you string words together or break them apart in lines. it could very well suit your purpose in another poem too. i wouldn't want you to have abandoned it. represent. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 02/21/12 at 11:44 AM ... congrats on POTD!!! |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 02/21/12 at 12:54 PM This is very well done and I too congratulate you on POTD! |
| Posted by Monique Louw on 02/21/12 at 06:16 PM Wonderful... |
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