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Posted by Angela Nuzzo on 03/26/07 at 05:53 AM !!!! You did it again, Peter! :) I love that introductory image of the red sky as hot metal being beaten on God's anvil. What a simile! And the way you contrast such elaborate description of a scene with a solid, everyday object (seagull) - just makes the fantastical that much more reachable for the rest of us mere human beings. Nice job! :) |
Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 03/29/07 at 05:15 PM This is a wonderful poem, a "tethering" poem, which itself is like a strand, a beam at sunset connecting earth to sky through sea. I love the "pinkening" delightful and fully expressive, inventive, adding a lightness and just the right color motion. Also the "shingle" shore is fantastic...as it leaves you out on a (sea floor) shore extension into the depths... and yet rings of "single" (two as one) and the "gull" in its own (similar singleness) "ponders" as you imply-- both you two and the sky... |
Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 03/30/07 at 06:13 PM Hi Peter. Love the: "pinkening/puckering/clouds".
...and don't we all have those beaches we strive upon? Not always easy going, amidst the sand and rock...but who would trade the view that we must be willing to see? Thanks.
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Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 04/01/07 at 11:40 PM You are so impossible! I love the alliteration! Just slipping on my ever pinkening blush!
...off to ponder yonder |
Posted by Mara Meade on 04/03/07 at 01:45 PM Wonderfuly descriptive. I loved the image of "a seagull sits and ponders." |