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Upon Doves Wings
by Rhonda Maneki
They made love
in their field
of wild flowers,
Love so slowly,
so completely,
their cries of
passions release
flew upon wings
of doves to
the heavens.
His love for
her encompassing,
At peace, a river
of emotion which
is theirs
Within each
moment of
each and
every day,
He loved
her like
this.
03/03/2007 Posted on 03/03/2007
Copyright © 2024 Rhonda Maneki
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 03/03/07 at 04:54 PM Some really beautiful, strong imagery in this. And I love how you start this off. Wonderful work. |
| Posted by Alisa Js on 03/04/07 at 04:13 AM ,
'their cries of
passions release'.....Might I suggest? their cries of passionate release???
Third stanza... I would remove ...At peace...
try it... to me, it does flow smoother... to this hopeful romantic.. let me know what you think.ok???
aloha..;) |
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