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Flight Mermaid j7.
by Steven Kenworthyshe drove ten hours to be in my dreams, the dream the truth the fate,
great lake.
the mermaid.
non-blonde, the ravens dark hair, dark eyes, bright mouth.
all over, she is everywhere, myworld, universe, galaxy
is a construction site of glowing pyramids of plankton
glazed temples featuring matted photography minded
a wonder of the world. i wonder how we met. wait i know,
luck is blessed consequence. luck is falling into you.
luckisallofmyliferunningtogethertofindexactlythis.
i will look over you like the crows eyes.
i have waited my life.
you are the mermaid. i am battle-ready, a portuguese man owar
i will fight for you until i fall over or dry up on seacastle drive, safe
with me you are with me with you i am with you with this we are
unsinkable ships.salty lips. touchmy ocean hips. sing but do not rhyme.
i am breathing aloud in this sleep. watching you close&counting piranha.
we are alive in the sea. i will protect you from dangerous things.
02/25/2007 Author's Note: almost mythical
Posted on 02/25/2007
Copyright © 2024 Steven Kenworthy
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Angela Nuzzo on 02/26/07 at 11:31 AM I love this section: "safe / with me you are with me with you i am with you with this we are / unsinkable ships." It leaves the reader breathless, like the lovers in the poem. Well done, SK. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 02/27/07 at 06:31 AM It's as if all your linking words, magnetic, now have come from "luck"...to "this". To bliss. What a tremendous verbal and psychological satisfaction. And you have kept both currents going right through the poem. It leaves me breathless too, but luckily, you give recovery space! The spaciousness. (I can't stress enough how unusually effective I think the open space is in this poem.) It allows a basking on the beach of this watery world, a catching up with the amazing fullfillment. The strong sea imagery so consistent throught, and the fierce protectiveness against invaders takes beyind the dream state and demonstrates a grappling with the inherent threat that even the "blessed consequence" --in reality-- exists within. |
| Posted by Elizabeth Seago on 03/01/07 at 10:26 AM This could very well be your best one yet! I am absolutely enamoured. (Being an aquarian, this one hits me in my special place. :D)"luck is blessed consequence. luck is falling into you./
luckisallofmyliferunningtogethertofindexactlythis."
spectacular stanza!!! Although, "man o' war", it's ovbiously a whole lot more than just luck, considering all of these battles you've been fighting to guarentee her safety. What I treasure most about your writing is the detailed, breathtaking pictures you paint seamlessly in my mind. They knock me off my feet everytime. Everything plays out so clearly in my head, like a watercolor movie. Great write. I've added this to my favorites. |
| Posted by Rebecca Andre on 03/02/07 at 06:36 PM angela's favorite line is mine also. Wonderful! a poem any woman would wish desparately to have written about them!=) |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 07/04/07 at 05:55 AM mermaids are my favorite ;) |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 10/22/07 at 07:56 PM Love always feels like an ocean to me, and sometimes I am being carried by a vessel, other times floating in no danger, other times in grave danger of being swallowed, and my response, to swallow the sea instead. I'm glad you found your mermaid. |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 11/27/07 at 06:47 PM "luck is blessed consequence. luck is falling into you.
luckisallofmyliferunningtogethertofindexactlythis."
To read these two lines - line two the one we won, runon- as we all hope this momentwilllastexactlylikethis is superb.
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