{ pathetic.org }

Shouting Whisper

by Razel Davies

Feel my heart beat,
Run on and on.
Hear my whisper,
So far and silent.
See my gaze,
From such distance.
Know my passion,
Across the room.

Feel my breath,
Dissipate to reach you.
Hear my lust,
Reaching out.
See my smile,
With a telescope.
Know my love,
Shouting for you.


Posted on 02/21/2007
Copyright © 2021 Razel Davies

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Meagan Green on 02/22/07 at 12:11 AM

I loved every word of it. Nice job :)

Posted by Becca Kinser on 02/22/07 at 01:24 AM

"See my smile, With a telescope." Loved those lines.

Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 02/22/07 at 03:29 AM

I like how thing is set up, with each line kind of meant to be a shot to the heart, one after another. It's very nicely done.

Posted by A. Paige White on 02/22/07 at 04:11 AM

Very haunting in a very present way. Wonderful combination. I may have telescoped a smile or maybe half a smile once or maybe twice. I really like that thought. Makes me smile. From a misty distance, of course.

Return to the Previous Page

pathetic.org Version 7.3.2 May 2004 Terms and Conditions of Use 0 member(s) and 2 visitor(s) online
All works Copyright © 2021 their respective authors. Page Generated In 0 Second(s)